Under The Weather
Entry by: writerUEFPLYNAYO
13th February 2014
I am feeling under the weather ! Michael Fish is standing on my head.
I wish I could get into bed!
But Fish is here and he wants to be fed.
I mix him up some oats and raisins, a hearty breakfast for the man.
But he wants spaghetti out of a can.
What can I do? I only am what I am.
I wish I could get into bed!
But Fish is here and he wants to be fed.
I mix him up some oats and raisins, a hearty breakfast for the man.
But he wants spaghetti out of a can.
What can I do? I only am what I am.
Feedback: Average score: 220 (44%)
Marker comments:
Marker 1
- Feedback: Repetitive rhyme is overdone. There is a sense of light-heartedness but the poem begs for more words.
Marker 2
- Feedback: This makes me want to know who Michael Fish is! And I had a little chuckle as it is light hearted and fun :)
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